thank you for your contributions, but you are not following the manual of style. please remember to use american english spelling and grammar conventions at all times. see ESB:Manual of Style and ESB:Grammar Guide for more information.
alright, the main issues i'm noticing are that you're placing punctuation outside of quotation marks and writing in past tense. punctuation always goes inside quotation marks, and you should always use present tense when you're describing something that takes place in the show. you should also be using "who" instead of "that" for characters (x is a character who appears in y).